Friday, July 15, 2011

The One You Love to Hate

As I don't believe I have posted anything from my current labor of love, Bleed, I think I shall. I didn't have much time to work on it today, but I recently ventured over the 50k mark; safely putting me in novel territory. This is very exciting.

Here are a few paragraphs in celebration.

To give you a bit of an idea what's going on here, Max is the MC, and the head of a company that deals in the unexplained. They recently lost a team member, and Max has been putting off hiring a replacement. So, her coworkers decided to take things into their own hands....

It’s no secret that I’m not a people person, but I try my best to be at least pleasant when I meet someone. If they haven’t caused a problem that’s directly affected my life in some way, I give them the benefit of the doubt. But sometimes I just get a feel for someone and they rub me the wrong way. Sometimes I’m looking for something to be wrong with them. And the second I saw this girl, I was praying that there was something wrong with her.

She was a classic kind of beauty. She was tall and thin, and when she stood to greet us, I felt like I was talking to a gazelle. She had straight, shoulder-length blond hair that I assumed was natural, because her skin was pale and her eyes were a grayish blue color that kind of disturbed me. Jake had eyes like that. His were hazel, but some days they were green and other days they were brown. It always made me feel like I was looking at a different person.

Her smile revealed straight white teeth, but when she held out a hand for me to shake, I noticed that her nails were bitten all the way down. It was the only hiccup in her perfectly tailored image, complete with an expensive suit and four-inch heels that I knew cost more than I made in a month. She was the kind of person you love to hate, but the fact that she tripped on her designer heels as she tried to get across the room made me like her a lot more.

I hope you enjoyed it :)



  1. great imagery, keep up the good work :)

  2. Good job of picking telling details. You've made her sound intriguing.

  3. Thanks so much, Suzie! I figured her first appearance had to be very visual. It's like an introduction, no?